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When you tore my heart out

And threw it to the ground

Mirthful eyes

That laughed at me

I reached out

To touch you

To apologize

And you shattered

I know why too

It's because you were

Ashamed

Afraid

Embarrassed

Anxious

And you thought that

If you accepted

My hand

Then everything would crash

But as it turns out

You were wrong

Because when I reached out

And you rejected me

You broke

All on your own

I pick up

Your pieces

With remorse

Now I'll have to

Buy a new mirror
This is an apology to myself.
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TheVictoriousWolf Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This certainly has to be my favourite. I love how you have organized the poem, instead of sticking to stanzas. Though you do that with all of your poetry, I especially like this one, as it reminds me, fairly accurately, of my own feelings on recent, personal events. A fantastic read. Thank you for writing it.
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so very much! Some of my poems aren't actually organized like this, amazingly enough but I do like this style a lot. Thank you so much, and oh dear, I hope that whatever's happening goes well for you D: Thank you for reading, I'm honored.
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TheVictoriousWolf Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! You're honoured? Now we're on the same page, regarding the reading of each others work ^^ As for... that, lets just say the journey back can be harder than the journey there, hm?
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Student Writer
Haha, well that's a good thing indeed then! Honored of a favorite or two from me? You need to have higher expectations my dear. Yes, I can understand that quite well indeed, unfortunately :(
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TheVictoriousWolf Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Low expectations lead to pleasant surprises!



My, my, I do believe I just said something optimistic. The world must truly be ending in three days time.
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Student Writer
That they do, that they do that's actually a good way to look at things, I hate hoping and having expectations especially well, only when they get broken which is fairly often unfortunately

You're not a very optimistic person? Hmmmm, that's too bad. I wouldn't say I'm an optimistic person, but I do tend to be, hmmmm pleasant? Pleasantly.... smiley? No, no I don't I don't I don't know what I'm saying so sorry so sorry. The world is ending in three days? Ah, yes, why so it is. Where I live free ice cream is being given out that day, so at least we'll go out happy :)
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TheVictoriousWolf Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'm pleasant, by most accounts, I'm just not unrepentantly optimistic. The world ends the day before my birthday. My birthday is on the 22nd of December. I don't care what they give out here, I will not be going out a happy chappy xD
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Student Writer
Oh dear, I do know someone like that and it's the most obnoxious thing in the world sometimes I wanted to grab that girl and give her a strong slap, unfortunately for me I'm a nicer person than that and missed my opportunity to do so

The day before your birthday? Well then obviously the world doesn't end, or someone was off somewhere, you can't just cut off peoples' birthdays like that. How old will you be? Or sorry, is that too personal? My apologies, oh dear I'm sorry am I scaring you away with my constant chatter (not that it really counts this being on-okay I keep pointing out this is online which it obviously is, sorry I really do talk too much)

PS: By the way, it's not my fault that sometimes I spell things not British English, blame spell check and autocorrect!!! Though I'm still American, so maybe it is just me, anywho, sorry and wait I don't think there was anything to apologize for but yes?
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Azizica Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student General Artist
I'm my goodness! This is amazing!
Love is a very fragile emotion.
I'm going to read the rest of your deviants now
K.thnx.bye
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very very much :)
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Azizica Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student General Artist
My pleasure!~
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InklingsOfOblivion Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful.
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you.
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Lunawerewolfy Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful!
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Perianth5 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student General Artist
Wonderful poem! But you don't need to apologise to yourself! Be happy! :aww:
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you, but I'm afraid I do need to apologize to myself. There's just too much I've left unsaid for too long.
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Perianth5 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student General Artist
:aww: Well, just remeber to thank yourself once in a while too!
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Writer
When there is something to thank myself for, I will
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Perianth5 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student General Artist
:aww:
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Will7744 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Professional Writer
nice - you don't have to explain the poem in the tag section - does it all by itself - trust your readers - lot of lit. people hate these linear poems - I don't - lets you take what would otherwise be a prosaic piece and pace it out in interesting ways - you do that well here - like "And you shattered" - stylistically and narratively my favorite image, followed by "You broke/All on your own" - you follow up "And you shattered" with a list of clean staccato notes that work well - slick pacing - not sure if this is genuinely emotive or artifice but either way, could be time to forgive yourself - you wrote a solid poem
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you for your thoughts! This is genuinely emotive, I'm going through some hard times (for me) and well, poem. Thank you very much.
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NigmaSin Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is Masterpiece!
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much!
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LittleCupofCocoa Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
It's sad.. But the ending made me smile.
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Writer
Yeah, I'm starting to like the ending more, it adds a brighter side to the poem, though at the same time I was attempting for a hidden darker edge.
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LittleCupofCocoa Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
...ah. I see the dark side now that you mention it. So much of my work has hidden meaning I intertwine within it.
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Writer
:)
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LittleCupofCocoa Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
:)
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silvergabetha834 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Professional General Artist
The end was a nice twist. Lovely work.
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much, I was hoping that it'd be alright
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Darkflametailz Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:happycry: This was very touching-but then the ending made me laugh. :lmao:
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Writer
Well that's fine too! Laughter is good! I'm not sure if this is supposed to be humorous or not but I can't complain if someone has a positive reaction to it :)
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