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Words, words, words... by Kublakhan27

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We stood at the altar
In the fresh aesthetics of spring
You took my hand in yours
And slid on that fateful ring

I wore a fair dress
Clothed in a flurry of white
The poison smile
On my wedding, the only blight

So beautiful it was
My dress stained red
Our passion unbidden
I took off your head

We promised love
Till death do us part
And it shall
For your head, take my heart

My dear, my darling
Forget me not
Honor our righteous vows
And love me till I rot

Blissfully content
We vowed forever
Let my love
Bury us together
I can't write :^I

EDIT: Well, I still don't think I can write all that well (I submitted it to lots of groups because I like this one the best out of all my poetry and I do like compliments and favorites, not going to lie) but I see that at least some people think I can so for that I'm very grateful to you all, thank you very much it means a lot to me (as cliche as that sounds).

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CaspromVX Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
I would like to ask you, if you wouldn't mind, If I could copy your poem and give you the owner rights on it, for my blog. Which weekly, has a topic on writing, where I try to pick up the work of some people to share in there.

By the way, I always have to ask which name you'd like to show on your work identification. You Deviant nickname or some other? Also, do you confirm you've selected the copyright protection when you submited this work?
I loved this poem, that I think you already know... =) Hope to get a response
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student Writer
Ah! Sorry for the late reply! I wouldn't mind at all as long as you credit me, my username is fine :)

Thank you, I'm honored!
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CaspromVX Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you very much! Of course I gave you all of the credit, and added you profile link for all of the users to get acess and see more of your work. Hope you won't bother...
Thank you for letting me share your work on TAOL ( casprom.wordpress.com ) if you would like to tag or point another writer who would deserve to see his work prublished and spread, I'd love to help!

Thank you and Blessings,
Casprom Reikings =)
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ThatFunnierPiece Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
It's a wonderful twist after a heavy dose of poetry justifying madness or sorrow. Lines are short and descriptive, cruelty is caught and preserved, not explained. A very good piece.
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much! I was trying to capture more of a "this happened" sort of poem. Not a "this happened and here's why" kind. So I'm glad I achieved that.
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artsy-akalei Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Whoa. read this while listening to some haunting orchestral music, gave me goosebumps :XD: Amazing job.
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Writer
Oh wow thank you very very much!!!
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JJmyster22 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Every time I read this, I'm just amazed at your talent (Well, I was amazed even before then).
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unusedEmotion Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Writer
Ahaha thanks so much JJ :D
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RifleTwoFour Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like this very much : ) The visual imagery is wonderfully dark and it seems to have a voice all of it's own atatched to it. Love it!
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